Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

Every species in
this
world including
human
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is a part of
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the environment
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environment
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cycle. Some people
says
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that we should only save those
animals
which are beneficial to people in their daily life, which is true.
However
, I disagree with the claim because other
animals
are
also
for
nature
balance.
Human
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Humans
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are depending on some of the
animals
such
as
cow
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cows
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, buffalo,
goat
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goats
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,
camel
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camels
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and so on. But wild
animals
are
also
a part of
environment
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the environment
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. In
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environment
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cycle
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every
animals
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animal
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are depending on
other
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another
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one, one way or another. We know that deer feed from the grass or tree and it
become
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food for
line
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the line
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. After
death
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of
wild
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a wild
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animal its prey mixed with the soil of
earth
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.
This
creates fertilizer which is useful for grass to grow and again ecosystem begin from grass and
it's
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continuous
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process. In
this
process there are many other
animals
including wild
animals
are essential for keeping
the
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nature
in
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stable
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the stable
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.
Moreover
, keeping all the
animals
safe will help
human
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humans
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in another way too.
For instance
, there are many
incidence
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happened recently, wild
animals
such
as
lion
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lions
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,
tiger
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tigers
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are coming outside from the jungle and they are making target
to
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the human as their food source.
This
is happening because they are unable to find food in
forest
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the forest
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.
Hence
, if we protect all the
animals
in
this
world
then
this
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problems can be solved.
However
, there are some negative points of saving too many
animals
. If the number of forest
animals
become
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more they release from the jungle and hunt the people of the societies. So it cannot be tolerable if
animals
number become unstable.
Otherwise
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nature
cycle
become
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uncontrolled. To recapitulate, it's
responsibility
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of
human
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humans
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to protect all the
animals
in
this
world. Which can keep
nature
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in
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is
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stable and treat them equally.
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