Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

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Every species in

this

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world including

human

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is a part of

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the environment

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environment

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environmental

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cycle. Some people

says

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that we should only save those

animals

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which are beneficial to people in their daily life, which is true.

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, I disagree with the claim because other

animals

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are

also

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for

nature

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balance.

Human

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are depending on some of the

animals

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such

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cow

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cows

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, buffalo,

goat

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goats

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camel

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camels

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and so on. But wild

animals

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are

also

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a part of

environment

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the environment

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. In

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the environment

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environment

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environmental

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cycle

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every

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animals

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animal

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are depending on

other

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another

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one, one way or another. We know that deer feed from the grass or tree and it

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food for

line

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the line

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. After

death

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the death

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wild

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a wild

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animal its prey mixed with the soil of

earth

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the earth

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This

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creates fertilizer which is useful for grass to grow and again ecosystem begin from grass and

it's

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continuous

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process. In

this

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process there are many other

animals

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including wild

animals

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are essential for keeping

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apply

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nature

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apply

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stable

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the stable

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, keeping all the

animals

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safe will help

human

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humans

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in another way too.

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, there are many

incidence

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happened recently, wild

animals

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such

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lion

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lions

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tiger

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tigers

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are coming outside from the jungle and they are making target

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apply

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the human as their food source.

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is happening because they are unable to find food in

forest

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the forest

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, if we protect all the

animals

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this

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world

then

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this

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problems can be solved.

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, there are some negative points of saving too many

animals

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. If the number of forest

animals

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become

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more they release from the jungle and hunt the people of the societies. So it cannot be tolerable if

animals

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number become unstable.

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Otherwise

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nature

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cycle

become

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becomes

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uncontrolled. To recapitulate, it's

responsibility

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the responsibility

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human

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humans

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to protect all the

animals

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this

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world. Which can keep

nature

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apply

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stable and treat them equally.

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

7.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

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300 words

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Animals are in danger of extinction. Some people say that we should protect only those animals which are useful to humans. Do you agree or disagree?

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