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IELTS Writing Task 2 Model Answer: Increasing the price of petrol is the best way to solve growing traffic and pollution problems.

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Some people may argue that increment of cost for fuel as a better solution for increasing road congestions. But
this
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price
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 may not a fine inaccessible aspect for the people who own a vehicle. There are many reasons behind growing traffic condition in the world than cheapness of petrol or other fuel. It is normal to increase the number of vehicles with the growing population and increase the
environment
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 pollution coincide. But there are many other possible solutions. As a perfect solution, I can suggest that moving on to green fuels. Green fuels or renewable fuels
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 cause
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any harmful effect on air pollution or releasing any gaseous or liquid chemicals on the environment. Already there are vehicles which are used
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instance
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 solar power and electrical power etc. are used in cars and vans. There is a trend of buying electrical and hybrid cars today in
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society. A good road system is a must for
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 the congestion in urban areas. So, countries should pay attention
on
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 developing and constructing the road systems wider with several lanes and including
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flyovers
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fly overs
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 at necessary points. By that more space will allow more vehicles to move at once on roads without any blockage.
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, there was
a
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heavy traffic during busy hours in
Nugegoda
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the Nugegoda
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 area in Colombo
in
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two decades before. But today it has
brought
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 down to a considerable low level by introducing several
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flyovers
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fly overs
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 in busy junctions and reconstruct roads wider by adding more lanes.
Accordingly
,
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above suggested
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 measures would be better solutions for
reduce
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the
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heavy traffic than rely on reducing petrol.
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