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Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems. As well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with the statement?

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Communication is an effective tool in bringing people together. Some persons argue that habiting in
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nation
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 where an individual is required to speak their native
language
 could lead to social and physical conflicts. I completely agree
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 the statement because it could lead to depression and unemployment. At the forefront,
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 barrier may lead to an individual being withdrawn from self and society. Due to lack of basic knowledge of the community's dialect, the person won't be able to communicate effectively with the local people probably when in dire need of something like shopping, visits to medical facilities.
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 the individual being depressed. Another issue that may arise due to
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 to speak other languages aside from the person's native
language
 is unemployment. Different organizations and companies would prefer to employ staff
that is
 versatile in various languages so
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 communicate properly with customers or clients thereby ensuring smooth running and positive growth of the sectors. Whereby the foreigner doesn't understand or speak the country's
language
, he or she won't have the opportunity to gain employment.
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, only natives of Filipinos who speak and understand Tagalog are qualified to work in hospital settings. Conclusively, residing in a state where speaking their
language
 is a challenge would likely lead to altercation both socially and physically. I strongly affirm
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, because it tends to result to
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 and being idle
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 making the adolescent unproductive
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • linguistic proficiency
  • cross-cultural communication
  • miscommunication
  • social integration
  • linguistic alienation
  • cultural dissonance
  • language acquisition
  • communication breakdown
  • interpreter services
  • language courses
  • bilingualism
  • multilingualism
  • language barrier
  • effective communication
  • cultural assimilation
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