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Small businesses should avoid recruiting young women who do not have their own family in order to avoid paying maternity leave later on. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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There are many factors to indicate why gender discrimination in the
workplace
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 still remains one of the most serious problems nowadays, despite the positive shift of social prejudice
on
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women
. Involving in maternity leave payment, many people believe that small businesses should not hire single female employees in order to entirely remove
this
 future expense.
This
 essay will provide reasons to refute the aforementioned statement. Considering a long-term profit, it is undeniable that the revenue young
women
 bring to small
companies
 can far exceed the expense of maternity leave. Since there are no burdens or distractions bothering these employees, not only they can concentrate more on their works but
also
 they tend to have better productivities compared to the married ones.
Moreover
, because the trend of delaying marriage is rising around the globe, especially in America, the period that
women
 can fully spend on working is longer than ever. For short-term benefits, small
companies
 are more likely to have an easier negotiation with a low salary to young
women
 staff compared to married ones. While
women
 who already have their own family have to worry about daily expenses
thus
 require corporations to offer them a higher income, young females often care about prospects that their occupation brings,
therefore
 they tend to accept a low-paid job for its future benefits.
This
 will significantly reduce the amount of money that small
companies
 have to carry, especially for entrepreneurs,
thus
 allowing them to invest in
further
 development. In essence, the notion that small
companies
 should reject any application from single
women
 is what I strongly disagree with. They should focus more on future benefits that hiring young female employees brings rather than just pay attention to the expense that has little effect on the existence of their businesses.
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