Some people think that getting old is a negative thing, whereas others think it is much easier for people to live in modern society. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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the upliftment of medical science, the life span of humans is prolonged when compared with the past decades. While some claim that

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has more pitfalls than merits, some believe that they can obtain a high standard of living in their twilight lives. With the deterioration of the body system and quick change of

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, demerits outweigh benefits in longer life expectancy

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of all, there is no doubt that the stability of the

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brings a sense of security to the elderly in terms of financial subsidies. In order to reward the hardworkingness of the seniors in the golden ages, many countries provide pensions to them. Taking Canada as an example, it has a comprehensive social benefit network that citizens have no worries about their future

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since dwellers can have a monthly allowance after a certain age.

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, with the inflation of daily necessities and the needs of recreation activities, can the seniors live without financial pressure? Chronic diseases

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as hypertension, diabetics and respiratory illness are common in mature adults. Recently, the medical sector consumes the most in expenditures not only for personal but

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for the whole

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; medical expenses have a tremendously surge every year. To exemplify,

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Hong Konger can enjoy

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affordable medical treatment in a public hospital, the locals would choose a private hospital

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has speedy service and a wider spectrum of physicians but

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. It is difficult for the aged population to sustain their lives even if pensions are provided.

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the innovation of artificial intelligence,

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becomes more digitized, which widens the gap between

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older people and other generations. To

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elaborate, still over 70% of people who aged above 70 in Hong Kong fail to use telecommunication apps

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as Whatsapp while it is one of the most common communication tools

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who are reluctant to new technology, they would find mass barriers when living in a modern city. To conclude, even the flourishing of

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brings merits to the seniors, the financial burden and fast-paced life would limit

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. If the older people cannot fully immerse themselves in

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, it would be a drawback for them to become

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