Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people have? Has this been a positive or negative development?

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Topic Vocabulary:

Interact
Social media platforms
Networking
Instant messaging
Face-to-face interaction
Misunderstandings
Emotional context
Superficial connections
Deceptive identities
Privacy concerns
Social skills
Video calls
Online presence
Digital communication
Cyber relationships

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Nowadays the way many people interact with each other has changed because of technology. In what ways has technology affected the types of relationships that people have? Has this been a positive or negative development?

Fully explain your ideas

Some people say History is one of most important school subjects other people think that, in today world,subject like science and technology are more important than History. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In many countries around the world, rural people are moving to cities, so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Some people think that school and government should take responsibility to transport children to school. While some people think that parents should get children to school. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

Some people believe that team sports are very important for children to succeed in their career, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.