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In the future, nobody will buy printed newpapers or books because they will be able to read everthing they wantonline without paying.

#future #nobody #newpapers #books #wantonline
Newspapers and
books
 are considerably used to learn about
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topic
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 that a
person
fascinate
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 in past.
In
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the
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present, the world has many facilities to comfort
people
,
for instance
,
blog
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blogs
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, electronic
books
,
application
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applications
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, and anything else. I agree that
people
 will
use
internet
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the internet
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 rather than every
kinds
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kind
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 of paper printed in the future. In the past, many
people
 went to
library
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 or bookstore for bought some
books
 or newspapers, in order to follow a knowledge or news in daily. Whereas, now
people
 can find any topic
in
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an
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the
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 internet, so do not pay for that. It will save money significantly
,
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 if
people
use
 electronic
books
in
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on
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website
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websites
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. Electronic
books
 in many
website
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websites
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is
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are
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 for free, any
person
 can download to increase an unlimited knowledge. And theirs have many kinds of
books
,
such
 as novels, sciences, lifestyles, and anything else. Thiers is useful for some
of
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people
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the people
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 who do not have enough money to buy some
book
 for
theirs
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 purpose.
Moreover
, electronic
books
 are more comfortable than
books
, because electronic
books
use
 merely a mobile phone which everybody
carry
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 in
anyway
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, but
books
 are too large for carrying in public. And sometimes when a
person
 who bought some
book
 wants to learn other topics that do not have in
this
book
, they may
be return
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 to
bookstore
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the bookstore
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 again. If that
person
use
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online
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the online
an online
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book
, the
person
 can learn many topics which
wants
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want
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. In summary, I believe that in the future
people
 will
use
 the internet rather than
books
 or newspaper. For the reason that they save money and make
more
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it more
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 comfortable for them.
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