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Some people say that parents should encourage their children to take part in organised group activities in their free time. Others say that it is important for children to leam how to occupy themselves on their own. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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It is undeniable fact that all the actions
children
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 do or see, contributes to the overall development of their brain & personality. Being part of any structured form of exercise or free time leisure hobbies,
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 can bag so many things to learn or develop. There are the majority of life skills, habits which we all adopt in our childhood only. I will be discussing
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 of both the school of thought in my subsequent crumb of writing. I will
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 share my own opinion and rationale behind my thought.
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, I will advocate the
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 of structured series of
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. By involving child into
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 tasks like role play, group sports, group discussion, hide and seek, theatre outdoor excursions and many others, where he/she acts with other
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 of the same age they learn very basic but lifetime important skills. Few among those are, time management, coordination, cooperation, leadership, team spirit, team management, goal orientation, focus, respect for others & their role & contribution, discipline, protecting oneself and others, they learn from the mistakes done by
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 to these lessons, a kid collects many sweet memories to cherish forever. Moving forward to the points in favour of those who think that the occupying kids in free-time
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 which are less structured or organised. There are many
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 of these
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, like from these
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 child develops critical thinking , focus, grasping power, he and she will learn from his/her own mistakes and they will find out their own ways to get away from the boredom. To sum up, it is clear that the advantages of group tasks overweigh the
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 of unorganised
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. To list some, the very important part that child would miss learning in
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 type is how to interact effectively , how to be social, the art of expression, leadership, following instructions & rules laid for any activity. These are the things one cannot say no. It is better to learn these at early age
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 life and challenges have their own way to teach them. With all these skills, these
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 will be tomorrow’s confident youth.
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