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Some people think that managers alone should make decisions in the company, while others think that employees should be involved in the decision-making process too. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Ruling the
company
's work is a very hard task. Usually, it is the manager and director who make important
decisions
 for the
company
.
However
, some people think that
employees
 should
also
 go through a decision-making process which makes it easier for those who are in higher positions. In the
first
 case, it is easy to make important
decisions
 without disagreement from other
co-workers
 while in the
second
 case, there are a lot of new
ideas
 which can improve the
company
. Managers do a lot of work no matter what type of
company
 it is. They make important
decisions
which
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that
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 are
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most
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mostly
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most
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 beneficial for the
company
. Involving other
co-workers
 than
director
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the director
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 and manager
ruins
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ruin
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this
 strategy.
Employees
 do not know a lot of details about the
company
's finances and overall mechanism and they start to suggest unrealistic
ideas
 and solutions. In many
cases
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 the
decisions
 made by management leads to success.
Thus
, to take as much benefit as possible,
co-workers
 should rely on management.
However
, it can’t be denied that
employees
 are part of the
company
. They can bring some new good
ideas
 for the
company
.
Moreover
, collaboration with them can make
team work
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teamwork
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 better, raise competitiveness and strengthen the relationship among
co-workers
. So it is worth trying to bring
employees
 to the decision-making process. In conclusion, even if managers are capable of making the most beneficial
decisions
, allowing other
employees
 to participate in making
decisions
 can bring some new creative
ideas
 and improve teamwork.
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