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Some employers want to be able to contact their staff at all times, even on holidays.

#employers #contact #staff #times #holidays
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Being available on
holidays
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 is naturally required for workers in some special professions, but
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 idea is
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 attractive for most
company
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 owners. Personally, I think that any point has advantages and disadvantages, so depending on the conditions, if employees are available during
holidays
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 may provide advantages for both sides. For sure it’s a huge benefit for employers to be able to contacts their staff on
holidays
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 because it leads to more efficient solving urgent questions. In
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 case, all
company
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 processes are well monitored and supplied. Same
time
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 looks like an extra load for employees (more working hours, less family
time
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), so not each worker will agree to
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 generally. On other hand keeping workers available during
holidays
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 for sure will cost more and sometimes even a lot which is a disadvantage for a
company
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 but
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 a bonus for employees. Due to these contradictions, it’s truly required to find a proper way to motivate people with some rewards, like extra vacations or
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 shares, in exchange for their weekends. Some business owners mastered their diplomatic and negotiation skills in that extent, that can make proper undeclinable offers in all kind of situations. Despite working on holiday may be very well compensated it’s important to have work/rest balance in your
life
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 and after all, your
life
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's
time
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 is priceless.
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 idea is very well reflected in the slogan “work for
life
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, not a
life
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 for work”. So
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 potential benefits from extra work
time
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 with encreased payments may be attractive, but for sure there is should be enough
time
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 for rest and self-development.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Enhanced communication
  • immediate problem-solving
  • emergency situations
  • increased productivity
  • real-time feedback
  • project management
  • customer satisfaction
  • employee burnout
  • job satisfaction
  • mental health
  • professional and personal life boundaries
  • stress
  • autonomy
  • workplace morale
  • turnover rates
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