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university should accept equal number of males and females students in every subject

#university #males #females #students
We are living in the 21st century and
still
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 we do not encourage
women
 empowerment, there are different domains in that number of
women
 candidates or participants are very less, one side we are supporting and shouting for females to be added to the main league and another side we are not providing full exposure and opportunity to them.
Secondly
, I think universities should provide more or equal no of female candidates there are certain and some critical territory in that female scientists are very less due to their different possible roles in society, I personally feel in every domain where
men
 are working,
women
 can
also
 perform outstanding if the opportunity is given but
women
 different protocol mostly in south Asian countries as well as Arab countries their
women
 are only to sit at home and only to prepare food and take care children and their home. If
women
 are given equal chances in educational institutions
then
 certainly they will support their country even society and families,
therefore
 educational institutions should come forward to relax some selection criteria for
women
 because females can do well if supported and educated well they have different responsibilities other than education and job prospects and to support these
men
also
 contributes their share to support the family and females if
men
 will share family responsibility with them,
then
 it would be comparatively easy for
women
 to take part in university education.
Lastly
, I think
Women
 should provide the ample university admission in every domain that should be restricted for
men
 only because still few domains in university is dominated by male candidates
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therefore
 education institution should look into that and provide adequate help to
women
 literacy.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • gender equality
  • merit-based selection
  • academic performance
  • potential
  • interest
  • aptitude
  • diverse perspectives
  • enriching classroom discussions
  • learning experiences
  • practical implementation
  • gender ratio
  • historical disparities
  • underrepresented genders
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