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Crime rate has increase with the advancement of technology. Do you agree or disagree. Give your opinion.

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Technology
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 is a coin with two sides. With the advancement of
technology
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, people
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 has become more sophisticated and easier than before but on other hand, it has
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 made people
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 miserable and worse than that. It has allowed criminals to find new methods of doing crime which is becoming a concern for society especially for women and corporates as well. Some crime examples are related to cyber attacks like phishing, eavesdropping, bank fraud. Companies like to adopt new
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 to stay ahead in the market and improve their businesses but they are
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 concerned about cyber threats related to adopting any new innovation in order to protect themselves and their clients.
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, cyber attacks like viruses, malware, phishing if by any means got their way into the company's system or employee's system
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 they could lose of
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 dollars in a blink of an eye. That's why many companies have a separate division to handle these problems. Any new hi-tech when released in the market, criminals try to find new ways to exploit it ,especially against women. With tech like smartphones, today most of the users' information is available through social media or their Instagram pages so it makes it easier for those with bad intentions against some girl to track her and harm her whether physically or mentally. It has made it difficult for women to express themselves and due to that society has made them conscious about themselves. Innovation in
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 is done keeping
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 thought in mind that it will help others and make their
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 easier and to some extent it did but we cannot neglect its negative side as well, how its advancement is making people
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 difficult and contributing in the increase of crime rate.
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