Today more and more tourists are visiting places where conditions are difficult, such as the Sahara Desert or the Antarctic. What are the benefits and disadvantages for where tourists who visit such places?

Nowadays most tourists are going to visit some difficult places like deserts as the hottest or poles as the coldest places on earth. In my
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visiting
such
a
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horrible and dangerous places needs an amazing spirit full of encouragement. On one hand, the advantages of
such
a trip include proofing the
ones
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braveness to his
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herself and the friends come with and
additionally
it would increase the self-confidence which can motivate everyone to do greater works and his
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her life or job and
also
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find the best solution for the problems dealt with.
On the other hand
, there would be some
disadvantage
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including any danger and risk of getting lost or even died in some points if there be less information about the area and the weather,
for instance
, in
such
travellings.
In addition
, taking appropriate equipment is necessary.
Although
visiting everywhere can be so fascinating, but being someone who is familiar with the
rigion
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region
as a leader is a vital matter which must be taken into consideration before starting the journey.
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a
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conclusion, visiting all over the world is possible, even somewhere is known as hard and terrifying.
However
, it needs paying attention to the instruments and the people with whom you would be. So not everyone can choose his
/
her way to discover every part of the universe unless he
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she
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thinks carefully and receive helpful information before planning for
this
kind of adventurous
trips
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  • breathtaking landscapes
  • unique ecosystems
  • sense of adventure
  • personal growth
  • indigenous cultures
  • environmental conservation
  • climate change
  • environmental degradation
  • economically disadvantaged areas
  • physical health
  • harsh weather
  • difficult terrain
  • limited access to medical facilities
  • fragile ecosystems
  • habitat destruction
  • basic amenities
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