Some educationalists argue that non-exam, arts-based subjects, such as music, drama, art and craft, should be compulsory in the secondary curriculum. They believe that activities such as these can improve overall academic performance. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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bond with arts-based activities other than that of academics
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centuries. Some academicians opine that including arts-based subjects in
curriculum
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enhances the overall performance of the student. In my perspective, I completely agree with the statement and discuss the reasons for the same.
To begin
, art forms act as a perfect tool to exhibit the cultural values of each clan or society. So, learning music, art and drama
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equal to understanding the traditional history of the nation.
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, if
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is a part of
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, the pupil can easily
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the evolution of traditional values that he or she belongs to.
For instance
, recently a survey conducted by the cultural department of
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Nations proved that more than 42 per cent of the
students
are willing to pursue their career in
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sector and only less than 20 per cent of the
students
like to choose
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arena.
Additionally
, performance acts can act as a stress reliever. It can refresh
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of
students
after continuous studies and classes. To be clear, the brain cells get recharged when children sing songs or acting a character they like.
However
,
this
will enhance the overall academic and cognitive development of the child.
For example
, in
China
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the Government made
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to study any of the performance-based activities
such
as instrumental music or acting.
This
steeply improved the academic grade and
hence
able to build citizens with
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mind
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and fresh ideas. To sum up, today's children are tomorrow's citizens. So, it is the responsibility of authorities to take care of the mental development of
students
.
Thus
, it is better to include non-academic subjects as a part of the syllabus.
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