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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language.

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Travel,work as it is said by some people as reasons to learn a foreign
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 ,others dispute and believe there are more reasons for learning a foreign
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. Learning a foreign
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 is not solely dependant on ones needs to acquire a job or travel,
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 as a
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 much it is a foreign
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 it is used widely and worldwide.
English
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 is used in schools and in higher
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 of learning,not forgetting in most countries
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 used as an official
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 of advantages that come along with learning
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 foreign
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.One work purposes and travel
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 is important because it helps to some extent deal with culture shock and helps with better, though not fluent, ways of
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 the message.
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barrier
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 enhancing oneness and trust.
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 there are countries that require one to learn the local
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 and be examined for the same,A case in point is German,
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 is a prerequisite if one desires to work,study or even acquire
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citizenship,
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 speaking countries have not been left behind lately they require students,skilled and
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 workers to take up the
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 course and be examined for the same. All In
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 learning a foreign
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 not a must it comes in handy especially
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 that are not taught in our schools,it makes communication easier.
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" it never hurts to learn something new"learning is a lifestyle and there is great importance to embrace it. 270 words
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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