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Nurses should write personal statement for nurse who is looking for job in the UK. To what extent do you agree or disagree

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I am a dedicated and compassionate Registered nurse with career history in direct patient
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, proven ability to remain calm under pressure and skilfully handle difficult patients and high-stress situations. Consistently developing strong relationships with patients and families through therapeutic communications and respectful attitude. As an overseas nurse, I have received NMC decision letter and have successfully passed the NMC CBT Exam and the four modules of IELTS.
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, will require a Tier 2 sponsorship visa as I seek for an opportunity to
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 in the United Kingdom for better opportunities and where I can
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 bring remarkable contribution based on my proficiency and experience. Having worked in the following specialist facilities: Obstetric and gynaecology, Trauma and Orthopedic
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, Medicine, Surgery, Accident and Emergency, Paediatric
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, Special
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 baby
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, Dialysis center, Intensive
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, Ear Nose and throat (ENT) units, Opthalmology
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, Theatre and experienced a plethora of cases
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, Management of labour, Spontaneous vaginal delivery,Disc prolapsed, Lumbar spondylosis, Commuted fracture, Bilateral Heart failure, Chronic kidney Diseases, Diabetic foot ulcer, Hydrocele,Benign Prostrate Hypertrophy, Gun shot injury, head injury, Marasmus, sever malaria, cerebral palsy, Convulsion, seizures, epilepsy, Hydrocephalus, Jaundice, preterm babies asphyxia,coma, Acute Respiratory distress, chronic obstructive pulmonary disease ( COPD), Glaucoma, Cataract, Exploratory laparotomy, Appendectomy, hysterectomy and orchiopexy. I am now searching for an opportunity to
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 in the United Kingdom for better opportunities and where I can
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 bring remarkable contribution based on my competence and experience. I love new challenges and with my positive and proactive attitude towards
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 I will be ready to learn new techniques and take on several new tasks. I am very much interested in working Betsi Cadwaladr University Local Health Board because it values: Dignity, Respect and a comfortable working environment are important to me as they are in line with how I practice (give
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) as a nurse. I understand the Trust is Keen about service delivery and the quality of healthcare given to clients, families and the community as a whole and it would be a great pleasure working as a team member or even a leader as I have been nominated to lead from college to university. I
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 have the ability to bring the best out of my colleagues as I am always delighted in them being part of the team.
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, I am well grounded in Microsoft word, excel and have a vast knowledge in ICT.
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, i love to research more on a particular treatment regimen to ensure evidence based practice is used. The following are my skills: leadership, Adaptability, Flexibility, ability to
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 under pressure etc. I am certain that the above are just a subset of what I can offer and would be elated if i am granted an Interview. I anticipate receiving a favourable response and working with your Trust. Thanks.
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