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Some people prefer to spend their lives doing the same things and avoiding change. Others, however, think that change is always a good thing. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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 has always been an essential rule of nature. There is a group of
people
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 who believe in doing the same things throughout their whole lives. The remaining part favours the concept of
change
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 and try to practice in their daily life. In
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 my opinion will be mentioned. To
commense
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commence
 with,
people
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 are habituated with many things that they do daily and if they try to replace it with something different
than
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 it may turn out difficult and more time consuming for them to tackle it. The
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 reason to favour it is that to bring substitute any work or thing the most essential commodity is
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 and probably it contains time,energy and wealth. So if somebody wants a
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then
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 these points are needed and
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 can conclude in wastage of time , energy and wealth.
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, if a person decides to buy a washing machine
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 of washing clothes by hand, he needs a lot of money .
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loosing
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losing
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 some money even for the
maintainence
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maintenance
 and service of the machine.
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, suppose an engineer is designing a new software he never will use the same graphics and applications he used or has seen somebody else using it before.
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, he will get new ideas and resources to make it more creative . Even
people
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 don't prefer to use the same things rather they may get other alternatives
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 have more benefits than the former.
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, if
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 design a game with the same features,graphics and gaming same as that of temple run ,
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 less amount of
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people
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 will like it because it is already present in a game
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 has more
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 than that
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mine. To conclude,
change
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 is a notion
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 in need sometimes but
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other times
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othertimes
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 it turns out a bit difficult. I believe and favour that alternatives make life easily accessible and it is a rule that must be
practiced
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 to experience more and more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • status quo
  • stagnation
  • routine
  • comfort zone
  • predictability
  • specialization
  • innate
  • personal growth
  • adaptability
  • fast-paced
  • new horizons
  • equilibrium
  • progress
  • dynamic
  • transformation
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