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Social media is becoming increasingly popular amongst all age groups. However, sharing personal information on social media websites does have risks. Do you think that the advantages of social media outweigh the disadvantages?

#media #age #groups #information #websites #risks
Today with
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the
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 advent
many
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of many
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 social
media
network
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networks
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 and most
people
 using in all ages, and it
is become
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becomes
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 an integral part
in
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of
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 most
life
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 of
people
. With these developments in social communication, some issues and problems have emerged.
although
 the negatives
associated
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are associated
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 with social
media
, I think that
advantages
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the advantages
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 outweigh the disadvantages. In
this
 essay, I will discuss
advantages
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the advantages
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 and
disadvantage
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disadvantages
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 of
exist
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 social
media
 in
this
 era and put forth my opinion.
To begin
 with, there are many negative influences from social
media
 networks, one of the main problems is
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the spreads
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spreads
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spread
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 of disinformation that will
causes
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cause
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 numerous wrong decisions and do bad
action
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actions
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.
In addition
, social
media
 is proper of
rumors
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rumours
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 spread,
this
 is due to the lack of censorship of content since
who
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those who
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 publish are just normal
people
 without any official entity.
On the other hand
, it is hard to ignore
advantages
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the advantages
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 that comes with social
media
,
firstly
, by
follow
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following
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the
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apply
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well-known
people
 like doctors or researchers they can notify us with new information as well as it enables us to be asked them about anything related to their work even personal advice for free in a few minutes and the take
advantages
 from their responds them on other questions. In conclusion, my point of view,
although
 the negatives associated with social
media
 and the numerous of
people
 use it day after day will shape our future and our
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way of communicating and learning because social
media
 offers to us a
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wide range
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wide-range
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 of ways to learn from experts which contributes that to share the knowledge over the world.
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