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Write an essay to describe a sports player you like most

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Even though I am not a big fan of
football
 like my grandmother and my brother, I still admire Cristiano
Ronaldo
 – a professional footballer. I can say he is the most
favorite
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 sports player of mine till now. It’s undeniable that
Ronaldo
 has an outstanding appearance. His body is an eminent figure of every man in
this
 world. He is tall, long-legged and muscular. He must have hit the gym
everyday
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 to get into shape.
Ronaldo
 is 36 years old and clean-shaven with a square long jaw stubble, a straight narrow nose and thin lips. His
deepset
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deepest
deep-set
deep set
 downturned lidded brown eyes show his determination and consistency. I have just seen him through social media, so he is always in perfectly iron suits or in his
football
 team uniform.
Besides
Ronaldo
’s charming appearance, he is famous for his talent in
football
 as every
football
 teams want him to become their member. His
football
 skills surpassed the other
football
 stars’.
Ronaldo
 has brought a lot of goals for his team with his great shoot. As far as I know, he has won 32 trophies in his career, proving his outperform talent.
Moreover
, his personality is another reason why he
become
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 so popular. He is enthusiastic and responsible
as
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well as he will never miss any training and try to do all of
exercises
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 even some of those are too hard for him to do.
Furthermore
, according to his private life, he is a devoted father and who always puts his son
first
 and
also
 a dutiful son who loves and treats his mother well. Cristiano
Ronaldo
 is the best player in the world and
widely
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 regarded as one of the greatest players of all time. There may be many other excellent figures, but
Ronaldo
 is always the one I love and admire most.
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