Some people say that having a lot of TV channels is good, while others argue that it reduces the quality of programs. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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It is often argued that
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enhancing the number of
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is a positive change, while others disagree and think that it will result in a low quality of programs. I believe that having a variety of media broadcasted on
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is a great opportunity as it allows
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more options when choosing
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projects. In
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essay, explanations for both essays will be provided before making a certain conclusion. (71) On the one hand, having more
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is beneficial to the audience, because it provides
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wide range of
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programs’
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, different
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cater to different groups of
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according to their own tastes and preferences, so that individuals can watch the
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programs they are interested in.
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, children are fond of cartoons, while youngsters prefer watching reality shows which include educational, cooking and
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themes. Another reason is that, if there is a large number of
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, humans would not get bored and could widen their knowledge, obtaining useful information in diverse fields. Some
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who do not like to watch
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events, can switch to other
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and find the one which satisfies their wishes. (124)
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certain part of
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is concerned that telecasting various types of
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can reduce the content’s quality remarkably.
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, if there is an excess of
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, the competition
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the media market would grow significantly.
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, the share of pecuniary advantage probably would be infinitesimal for each program, leading to
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of the quality.
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, there will be more and more
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commercial purposes, containing a lot of advertisements, which lessens the enjoyment of viewers. Business advertisements are
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considered
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distracting and time-consuming activity.
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who are watching an action movie can be easily interrupted by ads as they require
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attention. In conclusion, despite the fact that broadcasting various
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results in
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degree of programs, because of financial issues, I still believe that providing media materials according to spectators’ taste is much more essential, as they broaden human’s horizons.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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