Many people work long hours, leaving very little time for leisure activities. Does this situation have more advantages or more disadvantages ?
In today's speedy life, long working hours may result in less
time
for recreational activities. In this
,essay we will elaborate on how such
situations tend to have more disadvantages and outweigh advantages.
Nowadays, most people chase money and try to achieve more in a short period of time
which results in an increase in stress levels. It will certainly impact the overall performance of an employee and may cause financial loss to the company. For instance
, as per the global economic survey conducted by third
-party vendors, an employee tends to make frequent mistakes under pressure as compared to staff who works for a limited period of time
. A perfect remedy to alleviate stress is to enhance physical activities such
as swimming, running or cycling, ,however
that would also
require time
.
Secondly
, individuals who spent more time
in the office tend to have conflicts with family members as they are not able to generally spend moments together. It may also
end up with broken marriage. For example
, as per the recent research conducted by the "Welfare Society of India", the number of divorce cases have been increased as compared to last
year records. Additionally
, kids with both working parents face several challenges such
as abuse by babysitters or become emotionally weak.
In conclusion, continuously working for a long period of time
may allow you to save money; ,
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,
however
it will come at cost of your personal health and family sacrifices. Add a comma
,however
Thus
, In my ,opinion this
proposal has more demerits than merits.Submitted by ishasharawat2 on
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Answer the 'Advantages and Disadvantages' topic
IELTS advantages and disadvantages questions normally give you a statement and ask you to comment on the advantages and disadvantages of that statement.
Answer structure for the type of essay
- Introduction
- Body paragraph 1 – advantages
- Body paragraph 2 – disadvantages
- Conclusion
Examples to start your body paragraph:
- The main advantage is...
- The disadvantage of this...
- The main benefit...
- Despite these advantages...
- One possible drawback...
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