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In some countries, most people prefer to rent their homes rather then buying them. What are the advantages and disadvantages of renting a home?

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When it comes to living, some
people
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 regard having their own houses as an ultimate pursuit. Vital and ideal as it sounds, I personally would stand on the negative side. The pursuit emerged because
people
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 were brainwashed by the real-estate commercials, and the concept kept passing on from generation to generation.
Construction
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 company is a big business. In order to earn more, they claimed that owning your personal
house
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 brings you a
happiness
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 life and kept keep jeopardizing the environment to build more houses.
People
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 believed the arguments, even for those who don’t necessarily need
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their own
house
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. Not only did it cause
people
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 to blindly purchase unnecessities, but it
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 profits the company with the sacrifice of our mother earth. Mobility could be another big matter if you don’t work at a company near the
house
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. As you bought the
house
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 sitting at a fixed spot, it could be inconvenient for us you to commute to the office. Some
people
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thus
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 rent a
house
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 near the office,
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 to say, you would have to pay more. Even though you these homeowners don’t rent one
house
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, transporting would cost you dear and time-consuming. Unless you live close to the
house
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, the expenses could increase be collectable, and time spent on transports could be wasted.
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, it is more than costly to buy than to rent one , though some insist that
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the property could
will
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become their belongings at the end of decades of payments. What they didn’t realize is the upfront down payment and the high mortgage. A repairment could be covered by the renters, whereas whoever has the
house
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ownership
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 should have furniture fixed by themselves or mechanics. In conclusion, without thinking
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the pros and cons thoroughly, it could be making a deal with a devil. Issues
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 as the level of convenience and value should be taken into consideration. After all, what we need is just a place to live in, which does is not equal to buying one ourselves.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial commitment
  • down payment
  • initial costs
  • allocate resources
  • maintenance costs
  • mobility
  • relocate
  • market fluctuations
  • property value
  • building equity
  • appreciate in value
  • asset
  • personalization
  • restrictions
  • rental increases
  • lease renewal
  • financial instability
  • housing budgets
  • long-term security
  • landlord
  • lease agreement
  • equity
  • substantial
  • property ownership
  • property market
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