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Many people believe that scientific research should be carried out and controlled by the governments rather than private companies. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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n contemporary society, many
people
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 think that important scientific
research
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 should be managed and controlled by
governments
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instead
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 of private
companies
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. Personally , I think that
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private
companies
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 should be given freedom for
researching
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 but with supervision under the
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governments
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government
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. For a variety of reasons,
government
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the government
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 rather than private
companies
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 should control
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scientific
research
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. Government has the facilities and resources to carry out
research
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 on
projects
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. It would provide the appropriate proper
projects
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 for certain
people
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 who are talented in
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 areas. Every scientist could take part in
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projects
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 using their professional knowledge if they join the suitable
projects
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.
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, the
projects
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 may have great achievements through those outstanding scientists. Apart from that,
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the results
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 of
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research
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the research
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 are better harnessed.
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, vaccination is good for human’s health.
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, In China, with the development of the coronavirus vaccine developed by the government rather than privately owned pharmaceutical
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,
people
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 would inject vaccination freely which is provided by the state. It not only makes
people
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's health better
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 but
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 can temporarily avoid the huge disease caused by the virus.Thanks to vaccination, we can live with
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body
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bodies
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. *pharmaceutical
companies
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, we have no reason to ignore the benefits of researching by the private
sectors
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sector
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.
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,
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the aims
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 for every private
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companies
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 are gaining maximum profits. For operating firms, there are numerous competitors producing homogenous
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 that they compete against others by improving
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the quality
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 of
products
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 and producing efficiency.
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,
people
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 would get
privilege
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the privilege
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 of new and better
products
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 and services. In conclusion,
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 private
companies
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 have
better
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a better
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 quality of
products
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,
governments
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 have wider opportunities for scientists and
research
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 results can be used in better and quicker ways. In my opinion,
governments
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 rather than private sectors should monitor
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scientific
research
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • scientific research
  • government oversight
  • ethical guidelines
  • public interest
  • public funding
  • transparency
  • widespread access
  • long-term societal benefits
  • profit motive
  • biased findings
  • restricted research
  • collaboration
  • bureaucratic delays
  • political influence
  • innovation
  • regulations
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