Nowadays young people are leaving their homes from rural areas to study or work in the cities. Why does this happen? Do the advantages of this development outweigh the disadvantages?

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We all leave our nest to pursue the future. Nowadays cities bring many attractions to the field for the nation to emigrate. When it comes to
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naturally go toward a better destination. There are multiple reasons for shift and it varies from person to person.
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, job hunting and study constitute the biggest proportion among them all.
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there are many advantages to transfer from an individual perspective, we can't avoid the disadvantages that come along. Why do family leave their homes to an unknown world and destination?
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no doubt, the majority of
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live in the hope of a better heart and future.
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longing for improvement in the quality of activity by leaving our comfort zones
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as pursuing a future in flight. exodus has become a culture, which interprets as
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activity-changing move for many, including students who pursue
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education or crowd who are hunting for a better job opportunity.
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, there are pros and cons to immigration from a macro level lens. Irrefutably, there are many advantages that one can benefit from living in a. Facilities, job opportunities and many other infrastructures provided by cities can enhance our lives.
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enhancement in the heart comes at a price, which one must pay. The cost of living still is not low. There are many expenses that one brings into consideration before moving to a
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as air quality, the rush phase of growth, stress and many other issues coming along with living in a big crowded environment like a . But the biggest issue hasn't been discussed yet. The biggest issue among all the problems with immigration is the shifting of skilled labourers from the countryside to concentrated areas
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as cities.
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abandonment leads to a negative depopulation in some areas that will be left underdeveloped as a consequence.
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gap in skilled labour grew larger to the level that some villages and countries will eventually become deserted.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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