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People aim to achieve balance between their work and lives. But few people achieve it. What are the causes of the problems? How to over come it?

#people #aim #balance #work #lives
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 diet and pleasant
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 lifestyle is popular nowadays, many folks target to find balance with personal and professional lifestyles and only
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 succeed in getting balanced
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 we will discuss what are the causes of
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 and how to overcome
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 the lifestyle of
people
 has become very difficult as there are less physical activities involved
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 most of the
people
 do there
work
 sitting at
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 due to which they have less physical activity involved
as a
result
 they pay less attention to
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 due to which they suffer
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 various illness.
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, due to heavy workload and high target culture in
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 most of the
people
 have given less time to their family because of which the personal
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are
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 not maintained.
for example
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some person works more but pays less attention to
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the family
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the
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it can
result
 in creating
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 in their
life
 .
thirdly
, folks should avoid unhealthy
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diet
 and junk food which is easily
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available
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personal
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 cannot have good
health
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result
is
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in
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 better performance in
work
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the work
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 environment, most of the
people
 eat food
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available
 on
street
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the street
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 which is not much expensive and
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 not better for good
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health
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as a
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 they may
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 issues . professional
life
 should have some breaks as
this
 could help an individual to overcome stress
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for example
 one should unplug himself from
work
 stressed
life
 and give some space for
socail
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social
life
this
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work
pressue
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pressure
 and depression related to
work
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life
as
a
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result
health
 of that person can be improvised .
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conclusion
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 I feel one
shold
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should
 pay equal
attentation
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attention
 to
work
 and personal
life
 as both are important for
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 person.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Work-life balance: the equilibrium between one's job responsibilities and personal life.
  • Overwork: working too hard or for excessive amounts of time.
  • Remote work: working from a location other than the central work office, often from home.
  • Flexible working hours: work hours that are adaptable to suit an employee's needs.
  • Commuting: traveling between one's home and workplace.
  • Digital technology: electronic tools and systems used to generate, store, and process data, often leading to increased connectivity.
  • Disconnect: to detach from technology or work communications, often to establish boundaries.
  • Time management: the ability to use one's time effectively or productively.
  • Prioritize: to determine the order for dealing with tasks according to their importance.
  • Employer support: programs or practices employed by an organization to assist employees in managing work and personal roles.
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