Globalization is creating world in one culture and destroying national identity. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Development in technology makes it easier for everyone to share and follow each other’s special occasions which not only taking
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under one roof but
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insisting them
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forget about their roots. Advanced technology is one of the salient
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for having all cultures together. Since
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people
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have social media available all over the world which
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it
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telling
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how to live their life by showing different countries customs and rituals. As a result,
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are becoming more enthusiastic towards them rather than their own special occasions.
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, India is famous for its Diwali function and for firecrackers but now
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Diwali is known
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worldwide through
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Instagram
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and
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so
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most
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country
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’s
people
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enjoy burning crackers on that special day.
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, Travelling
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also
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become
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affordable
for everyone in
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era.
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,
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can travel from one
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to another
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for getting information or enjoying other’s
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. If they like their living more satisfied than living in their own
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they decided to move in that
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for their whole life.
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, they begin to forget about their own identifications and consider themselves a part of that nation in which they are living. Overall, it has been becoming very
conveninant
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convenient
due to the latest
amenties
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amenities
like Social sites and
Autumobiles
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Automobiles
which giving
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to be a part of
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Globalization.

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