Globalization is creating world in one culture and destroying national identity. To what extent do you agree with this statement?

Development in technology makes it easier for everyone to share and follow each other’s special occasions which not only taking

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under one roof but

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insisting them

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forget about their roots. Advanced technology is one of the salient

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for having all cultures together. Since

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people

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have social media available all over the world which

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telling

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how to live their life by showing different countries customs and rituals. As a result,

people

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are becoming more enthusiastic towards them rather than their own special occasions.

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, India is famous for its Diwali function and for firecrackers but now

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Diwali is known

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worldwide through

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and

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mostly

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most

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country

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’s

people

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enjoy burning crackers on that special day.

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, Travelling

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also

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become

afforadable

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affordable

for everyone in

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era.

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people

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can travel from one

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to another

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for getting information or enjoying other’s

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. If they like their living more satisfied than living in their own

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they decided to move in that

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for their whole life.

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, they begin to forget about their own identifications and consider themselves a part of that nation in which they are living. Overall, it has been becoming very

conveninant

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convenient

due to the latest

amenties

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amenities

like Social sites and

Autumobiles

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Automobiles

which giving

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to be a part of

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Globalization.

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Sep 20, 2021

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Coherence and Cohesion: 4.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 4.0

Complete response

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224 words

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