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Space Exploration: Some people think that space exploration is a waste of resources while other thinks that it is essential for the human kind to continue to explore the universe in which we live. Discuss both views and give your own opinion

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While some people assume that exploration about our
universe
 wastes money, others believe
that is
 essential for
human
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a human
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 being to understand about our solar
system
.
This
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however
, as per
opinion
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, it is vital as it will help to understand
about
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the place of our planet in the
universe
 and about the history of our solar
system
. On the one hand, a significant number of people consider that doing experiments in exploring the
universe
 requires
large
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 amount of funds, which should
be utilise
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 in the development of the planet where human lives. As
launch
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the launch
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 of any rocket in space wastes millions of dollars;
therefore
 that amount ought to
be use
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 in the development of the
human kind
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humankind
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such
 as, development of infrastructure, generating employment, improvement in hinterland areas are among its example.
Hence
, it is considered that activities involving in the
reasearch
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research
 of
solar
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system
is
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are
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waste
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a waste
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 of funds. On the other side, many
person
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people
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 thinks that it will help to understand about our
universe
 and
human
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the human
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 being must explore about it.
Moreover
, its surveying tools and technology helps the community on earth to understand
about
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the air quality, weather and others aspects of our environment. It
also
helping
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helps
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 in finding other living space
in
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on
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 planets.
Furthermore
, it helps to create scientific and technical jobs, which will help in boosting the
economic
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.
Therefore
, experiments in researching about
solar
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the solar
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system
 and other planets
is
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are
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 equally essential. To conclude,
Although
 a
vaste
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vast
 amount of money wastes in doing research on planets
aparts
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apart
parts
 from
earth
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the earth
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,
but
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it helped in protecting
the
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society in many ways. As per my view,
it
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its
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 experiments on exploring about
universe
 ought to
be continue
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continue
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.
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