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One of the best ways to solve environmental problems is to increase the cost of fuel cars and other vehicles. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#cost #fuel #cars #vehicles
Many people advocate the view that the increase in the cost of nonrenewable fuels for transportation utilities is
the
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 great way to mitigate
the
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ecological issues.
This
 essay completely agrees with
this
 statement. I firmly believe that
such
 a policy strengthens the well-being of all living creatures and expands the budget of the
country
. To start with,
high
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 cost of fuels causes less pollution that can refresh living organisms. It helps to diminish the
amount
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 of greenhouse gases in the atmosphere
such
 as
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methan
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methane
mean
, carbon dioxide and others.
In particular
, the fresh and clean air can lead to the residents` good well-being and renewed flora and fauna.
For instance
, in the time period of pandemic and less pollution, fishes and other marine creatures of Japan came back to their original habitats. One more convincing argument in favour of expanding the price of
fuel
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source
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 is that it contributes to the prosperity of
country
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the country
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. Every year, the number of people using various types of cars and other vehicles is rocketing,
that is
 why providing new reforms about increasing cost of fuels can improve the local economy.
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 that can be the
country
 Venezuela, where the highest prize for
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oil is observed. All the taxes from the local drivers are being used for
development
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the development
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 of infrastructure or other sectors. Taking everything into account, one of the significant methods to combat environmental pollution is enlarging taxes for nonrenewable types of fossil because it beneficially affects
for
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the
country
 in both ecological and financial
way
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 on account of the strong and renewed health and
prospering
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a prospering
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 economy.
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