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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasise that their products are new in some way.

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Today many companies try to show their
products
 in some new
ways
 when they do advertising.
However
, I reckon, it is a positive trend. In
this
 essay, I will provide some arguments to support my view.
Firstly
, people always love new things. When customers see new features added to a
product
, they feel attracted to it.
Consequently
, consumers grab the
product
 instantly.
For instance
, “Lux” which is a well know
company
, always get good sell after their advertising because they earn consumers soul by sharing their content in new
ways
.
Secondly
, if any business wants to stay alive in the market, they have to compete with other competitors.
Otherwise
, competitors will get the market
instead
 of them.
That is
 why the
company
 designs their
products
 in new
ways
 in their advertisement. Despite positive trends, it
also
 has some demerits.
To begin
 with, it consumes the
company
’s
money
. As a consequence, businesses need to spend
money
 on
this
 advertising system. What is more, introducing
products
 in new
ways
 doesn't always bring a positive side, sometimes customers
also
 lose their interest in the
product
. To conclude, without new things it is hard to get consumers attraction these days. So, for
this
 reason, I believe that it is a good thing to focus on advertising by showing
products
 are new in some
ways
. If
this
 system works well,
then
 the
company
 will be able to make huge
money
 as well as brand weight.
Consequently
, advertisement companies
also
 will be able to make good
money
 by promoting others
company
's
product
.
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