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Space exploration is much too expensive and the money should be spent on more important things. To what extent do you agree with the suggestion?

#space #exploration #money #suggestion
Space
exploration
 is considered to cost too much and the
money
 could be spent on more essential things. I strongly agree with that opinion because we have more important
earth based
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 problems
such
 as hunger and
space
exploration
 harms
environment
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the environment
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.
Initially
, humanity does not need
space
exploration
 that much as some
people
 on the
Earth
 need food and water. According to BBC News, NASA spends nearly 3 billion dollars per year
for
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just keeping rockets, while there are 2 billion
people
 who are starving.
Besides
, the cost of worldwide hunger is 36 million dollars, which is
quarter
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a quarter
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 of the amount of
money
 only NASA spends on
space
exploration
. One year of care after rockets could give
people
sufficient
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a sufficient
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 amount of food for four years. It makes us question ourselves
,
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 if we really need
space
exploration
 or alive
people
. Despite costing too much
money
,
space
exploration
also
 costs our
environment
 and health. It appears that only one part of
rocket
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 actually travels to
space
, while other parts just fall down to the
Earth
. These parts may contain harmful elements that destroy
environment
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the environment
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 around, including plants and animals.
Moreover
, it
also
 spoils the water and the
Earth
 itself. It may hurt
people
 living near
such
 places who consume
these
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this
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 water and animals.
For example
, civilians of Karmakshy
that is
 located near the Baikonur spaceport often suffer from several diseases and have weak immune
system
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systems
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 due to cosmodrome.
Thus
,
space
exploration
 may occur harmful
for
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to
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environment
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the environment
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 and its
livehoods
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livelihoods
. To conclude, the huge amount of
money
 spent on
space
exploration
 could be spent on more significant things
such
 as starvation all over the world.
Besides
,
space
exploration
 has
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drawback
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drawbacks
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 in the face of
destroyed
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a destroyed
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environment
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • astronomical costs
  • pressing global issues
  • diverts crucial resources
  • technological advancements
  • wide-ranging applications
  • investments in the future
  • existential threats
  • fuels curiosity
  • drives innovation
  • economic benefits
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