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In many countries today insufficient respect is shown to older people. What do you think may be the reasons for this? What problems might this cause in society?

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It is undeniable that the respectfulness to
elders
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 or adults of
children
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 and teenagers is decreasing in many countries around the world, nowadays. From my point of view, I think that
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 problem can
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 several reasons, like from the child self or from the
elders
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, and
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 problem can
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 negative effects in society. In the following paragraph, the reasons to support my opinion will be outlined in the detail. In my opinion, I believe that decreasing of the respectfulness to
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 has many reasons that are caused by the toddler self and the older person.
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, some older
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 have some bad habits,
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 as the elder do not listen to the need of their kids.
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, the
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 always think that
children
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 are
children
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. When younger
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 want to explain somethings which are wrong for them, many
elders
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 always believe that they arguing rather than explaining, and some
elders
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 act like a toddler due to they will always do anything without reason and responsible.
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, decreasing
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 respectfulness can
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development in terms of mentality and emotions of younger
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,
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.
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, these issues can
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 many impacts in the community.
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, the toddlers do not obey the teaching of older
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, and the words of the
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 are not something
children
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 will follow.
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, these issues can
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the
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 gap between the generation.
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, when younger
people
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 grow up, they may grow up to be bad
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 who can make bad habits to society. In conclusion, I strongly think that
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 problem is caused by misunderstanding of younger
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 and older
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 due to the evolution of
children
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 thinking in the present has a difference from
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 in the past.
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, it is recommended that the
elders
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 should choose the right words to speak with kids, and they should try to understand some toddler behaviours that are improving all the time.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • social structures
  • nuclear families
  • extended family
  • intergenerational respect
  • dual-income households
  • technological advancements
  • perception
  • value shifts
  • vigor
  • innovation
  • increased mobility
  • neglected
  • mental health
  • generational divide
  • misunderstandings
  • stereotypes
  • social fabric
  • healthcare strain
  • inadequate care
  • quality of life
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