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More people have decided to have children in their later age than in the past. What are the advantages and disadvantage of doing so?

#people #children #age
It is a serious topic of discussion that at what age
people
 should have
kids
. Some
people
 like to have
kids
 in their early days, while some believe that one should have
kids
 when they are ready to explore parenthood. I am going to discuss the pros and cons of
this
 in the following paragraphs.
People
 believe that there is no certain age to have
kids
 especially when you pass your 20s.
In addition
, they are younger and can live long with their
kids
 while spending quality time with them.
Kids
 can grow together with their parents without worrying to lose their parent's, which is highly possible in older
people
. On the flip side, there are some cons as well. As the young parents are not financially secure because they are still going through their years of early adulthood. While the one's who gave birth to their
kids
 in their late 30s are more financially secure and tend to provide a better life to their little one's. In the
last
, I want to say that there is pros and cons to everything. Young parents are more energetic while
the
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older ones are more mature. I think it's better to have
kids
 in their late 30s as compared to their 20s.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Trend
  • Delaying parenthood
  • Biological clock
  • Financial stability
  • Emotional maturity
  • Health risks
  • Opportunity cost
  • Weighing the pros and cons
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