IELTS Writing Correction Service /
Writing Samples /
Band 3

Pie charts shows the electricity production in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.

Pie charts shows the electricity production in France and Australia in 1980 and 2000.
#electricity #production #france #australia
The pie chart
visualize
Change the verb form
visualizes
show examples
 the units of electricity generation in Australia and France by using different kinds of fuels
in
Change preposition
apply
show examples
between 1980 and 2000.
Overall
, it had been noticed that
,
Remove the comma
apply
show examples
 in
both
Add a comma
,both
show examples
the
Correct article usage
apply
show examples
years Australia had
depends
Wrong verb form
depended
show examples
 on coal as
Change the article
the
show examples
main source of electricity production.
On the contrary
, France was using all the available sources of fuels at the beginning
but
Correct word choice
apply
show examples
,
when
Correct word choice
but
show examples
 years later they started to
depends
Wrong verb form
depend
show examples
 on nuclear power as their main root
for
Change preposition
of
show examples
 electricity production.
Submitted by divyahemakumar2017 on

Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.

Introduction: The introduction is missing.
▼
Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
▼
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
▼
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
▼
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
▼
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
▼
Vocabulary: Only 1 basic words for charts were used.
▼
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
▼
What to do next:
Look at other essays: