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Online education is becoming more and more popular. Some people claim that e-learning has so many benefits that it will replace face-to-face education soon. Others say that traditional education is irreplaceable. Discuss both views and give your opinion. (traditional methods of teaching versus the modern ones.)

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Online education is a hot topic these days. Some
people
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 say that e-learning is going to replace traditional ways of learning as it's becoming more popular in the time of
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. I will be going to discuss both views in the following paragraphs and
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 be going to give my take on
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 believe that e-learning has more benefits as compared to its counterpart. They do have some valid points as online education is safer especially when you are going through tough times
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 as you don't have to miss your class as it's only one tap away from you. Another reason is e-learning is a big win for
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 who suffer from some kind of disorder or mental illness can
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 attend classes with normal
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 without even facing any humiliation. These are some of the reasons that I think definitely making e-learning a pleasant experience for everyone. On the flip side, some folks don't think like that they think traditional education is the best way to learn valuable skills that later going to help them in
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 life. They do have some valid points to prove.
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 who
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 in a physical classroom tend to be more social as compared to the one's who choose online
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. They can make bonds with other
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 who later help them in their life like finding a good job. So, all in ,all we can say that traditional classrooms are
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 very valuable for
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 who like to make new friends or in general like to socialise. According to my, both sides have some points that we can not ignore. As online
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 can help kids to spend more time with their loved ones. While studying in a physical classroom can
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 be valuable for outgoing kids. In the
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, both sides are right. I think anyway is good for
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. So it's up to them which way to
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 they want to go.
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