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It is neither possible nor useful for a country to provide university places for a high proportion of young people. To what extent do you agree or disagree.

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In some countries, educational policy is aimed at providing
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places
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 for most youngsters. I totally disagree that national authorities should adopt
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 a policy in the future. It is not feasible to offer
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places
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 for a large number of the young.
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, the cost of the practical measures to construct new campuses is prohibitive. Without schemes to build new campuses, they cannot deal with the intake of unprecedented student numbers. Even if these buildings were constructed, they would have to be needed to be maintained and staffed.
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, the
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 entrance standards will be lowered, enabling those with lower grades to gain admittance. Inevitably, the
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 entrance standards will suffer in the
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 years. It is impractical for government authorities to provide universities
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 for young people. A nation of expensively trained academic graduates is socially desirable.
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, there is a lack of skilled technicians and employees
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 as plumbers, electricians and truck drivers, at the same time, there is
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graduate unemployment.
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, it is more necessary for authorities to provide vocational courses for youngsters, combined with internship opportunities and on the job training.
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 as construction and nursing. By doing so, a balanced economy will sustain job opportunities for all sectors in the economy. In conclusion, I believe that providing
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 for a large number of young people is not beneficial to some extent.
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 of doing so, governments should improve the quality of education of existing high schools.
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