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Completing a university education is thought by some to be the best way to get a good job. On the other hand, other people think that getting experience and developing soft skills is more important. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

What is the best way to get a good job? Some people think that university education and professional courses
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help them achieve
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 their goals for
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apply
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personal
realization
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done
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apply
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 way to
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 strong and soft skills
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is
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 through experience, and I would
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about
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 mine. When I was a teenager, I dreamed about the college. I wanted to learn the History of Arts, and worked at museums as art seller. Dreams about spending time at the achives by readind about styles of arts, listening the old music and interwiew recordings was calmed me. But my parents have other vision for my future, so my dreams about the university's life was .
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, my passion for art drives me to the bohemian lifestyle. I'm continued learning about genres and artists,
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, I met a many of them, maintainly Ukrainian painters and musicians and I started to have a lot of practice in multidisciplinary art, inspired by their work. 10 years
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 I
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 a ceramist and calligraphy artist, without any . Otherways, all of
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would never
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 be possible by the

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organization
Make a clear plan before you write. Start with a short intro, state your view, then two body paragraphs (one for each side) and finish with a simple conclusion.
grammar
Use short, correct sentences. Check verbs and plural forms. Keep to basic grammar.
content
Use one example from life to back up your points. Make sure each idea links to the question.
content
The writer shows a personal voice and tries to discuss both sides and give an opinion.
tone
Some ideas about work in art show effort to link to the job talk.
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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • theoretical knowledge
  • specialized training
  • networking
  • baseline requirement
  • financial burden
  • hands-on experience
  • practical skills
  • soft skills
  • dynamic job market
  • entrepreneur
  • formal education
  • portfolio
  • hybrid approach
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