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Some people believe that there should be fixed punishments for each type of crime. Others, however, argued that the circumstances of an individual crime, and the motivation for committing, should always be taken into account when deciding on the punishment. Discuss both point of view and give your own opinion.

There are mixed views when it comes to whether fixed or flexible punishments should be used in ruling criminal offences.
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 to discuss both assertions, in favour of the latter. On
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 hand, the use of standard judgements can be useful in exercising fairness and upholding consistency in the courts. When an individual commits an offence
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 poaching of wild animals an already known sentence should be imposed. If for
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 crime different consequences are given,
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 might raise suspicions that the legal system is biased and
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 gives room for corruption. Mandatory punishment is essential for the sake of equality among different individuals
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, some argue that circumstances surrounding the offence should be investigated in order to determine the appropriate sentence.
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 two individuals may steal from a grocery shop.
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 to be connected to other pilferage offences. The
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 is a
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 thief.
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 may arm himself for the purpose to cause harm or kill another person. The other may kill a person mistakenly in a car accident. in both
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 murder was
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 different
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scenarios
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 the circumstance leading to the wrongdoing should be done to give
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 adequate consequence. In conclusion, flexible punishments are more
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 than fixed punishments. It is apparent that some people may get involved in crimes unintentionally and some premeditate and have it planned to
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 an offence. Exercising flexible measures would make sure that each person gets a sentence they deserve.

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