Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

After completing school
life
, all teenagers struggle to resolve the problem
whether
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they should enter
into
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a university for a
degree
or look for a
job
. Some see more plus points of doing a bachelors
degree
and start their career
life
afterwards, while others prefer to start
an
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employment right away without doing
further
learnings.
However
,
below
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paragraphs support the
first
view with reliable supporting ideas as having a
degree
or
same
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qualification explores a vast range of opportunities for a person. If an adolescent finds
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to make a choice between
above mentioned
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options, he or she should pick the option of possessing one or more academic qualifications which are acceptable in the
job
market. When they own
such
qualifications, employers
ready
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to offer them amazing salary packages which can never be achieved merely by school leavers. These compensations may consist of vehicle allowances, accommodations, tour packages and so on. As well as, having more academic and professional certificates in someone’s certificate file may open more and more doors into a huge world locally and internationally.
This
is because
,
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the quality of a
job
seeker can be measured from qualifications he or she holds based on standards and norms in the
job
market.
Eventhough
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Even though
enrolling
with
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higher education program is best for
the
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success, all do not get that chance due to various reasons. But, there are
number
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of examples in the world to prove that an academic qualification is not a must to win
the
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life
. If someone is interested in becoming
expert
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in some field
which
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experience matters more than
the
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knowledge, he or she can choose that
job
instead
of a
degree
. Not only that, if they are financially weak to continue learning, they can apply for a
job
and secure their financial status
first
.
Then
they can start some academic things if required.
Accordingly
, entering into
a
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higher education after
the
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school gives more choices in
life
to succeed rather than just doing a
job
.
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  • Academic qualifications
  • Specialized skills
  • In-depth knowledge
  • Personal growth
  • Social development
  • Practical experience
  • Financial independence
  • Career progression
  • Professional networking
  • Education
  • Work experience
  • Successful career
  • Personal interests
  • Career goals
  • Decision-making process
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