Families who do not send their children to public schools should not be required to pay taxes that support universal education. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Education
is right for all
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. A popular belief
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it is not a duty to pay
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for children who studied in public
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that would be allocated to assist universal
education
. I personally disagree with
this
statement
moreover
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are
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two main
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.
Firstly
, the taught that the children
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a
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studied in private
education
are not mandatory to pay
tax
will impact the government revenue.
This
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tax
contribute
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the biggest
precentage
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percentage
for
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government income which could
be use
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for supporting
school
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the school
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for people with less
priviledge
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privilege
to achieve good quality
education
with no tuition fees. In Indonesia ,
for instance
, about 40% revenue from
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used to support the
education
for unprevilliage student so that they can achieve
education
without thinking the tuition fee.
Therefore
,
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student
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students
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who studied in private
education
should pay a tariff so that the unpreviliage student can
education
with low fees.
Secondly
,
tax
is
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for all
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, the main reason is to welfare all
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from the gap between the rich and the
unprivilege
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unprivileged
.
For example
, in Indonesia
tax
are allocated to support
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societies
with
low-economic
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a low-economic
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condition which help them to achieve
education
for
thier
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their
child.
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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