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Having more money and less free time is better than earning less money and having more free time. Discuss both views and state your opinion.

#money #time
The pie chart presented the information of average household expenditure in each of
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 between 1950 and 2010. In the overview, it can be seen that both years have
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 highest expenditure of category. In 1950 the majority came from housing that
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 been occupied by 72.1
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 and the rest have 11.2
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, 6.6
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, 4.4
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, 3.3
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 and 2.4% (food, education, other, transportation and health care, respectively). While in 2010 the majority came from food which is occupied by 34
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 while the other expenditures have some significant and slightly risen
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, 14
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, 6.3
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, and 4.5
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 respectively. While housing is the only expenditure that have been drop more than halved of
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 in 1950. In summary, it can be observed that in
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 60 years, there are a lot of
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 in different categories especially in housing which is drop more than halved of itself in 1950 compared to 2010.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • financial security
  • facilitating
  • lifestyle
  • professional development
  • increased stress
  • work-life balance
  • hobbies
  • quality time
  • physical and mental health
  • financial constraints
  • luxury items
  • overall well-being
  • personal growth
  • middle ground
  • sacrificing
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