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Some people argue that working in a large company is important, others however give preferance to work in a small company.Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #company #preferance #work
With reference to above debate that
people
 usually have on working in a large organisation is better doing
work
 in small
firms
 is better. A lot of persons have a lot of queries on which
company
 is better to
work
 for in their future. We will conclude
this
 as below:
,
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 Some
people
 love to
work
 in large
companies
 due to their
work
 culture,high salary packages,higher performance-linked pay system,outstanding Infrastructure and bonuses which the employees get is awesome. With reference to bonuses,I want to share the benefit of the bonus that my friend got who is working in a
Multi National
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Company
. He almost got Rs 1 Lakh bonus in his 2 years experience in the
company
 which is huge I think .A person who works in
such
companies
 always gets higher pay packages in other
companies
 because of their experience if they want to switch to
other
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company
. Promotion in
such
companies
are
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 usually done in a short span. There is no doubt
people
also
 love to
work
 in smaller
firms
.
Usually
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 small
firms
 recruit from institutions or employment generations fairs. New employees Adjust to the Working culture of the industry better in smaller
firms
 than larger
firms
. Employees can give more time to their families due to fewer working hours.Some
people
 love challenges in their
work
 and
for
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those
people
 working in small
companies
 give them the opportunity to prove themselves by getting better business deals in which there is huge competition in the industry due to huge MNC's.
This
 is always a challenging question if one ask ,which
company
 is better large or small organisations. I would like to say that working in a large organisation is better which is explained above. Submitted by harsimarkaur4 on Tue Sep 21 2021
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