Many museums charge for admission while others are free. Do you think the advantages of charging people for admission to museums outweigh the disadvantages?

The given diagram demonstrates how the bricks are made for the building industry.
This
process is consist of six stages.
To begin
,
first
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it starts with digging the
clay
and for
that
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they use a digger. After
that
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we place the
clay
over a metal grid to break the
clay
. A roller
assist
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in
this
process. Once we obtain the right consistency of the
clay
, we add water and sand into it so that it becomes easy to mould the
clay
. There
two
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option
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we can use to give proper shape to the
clay
. The
first
one is, we can either use a wire cutter to cut the
clay
mixture and the
second
one is the moulding structures.
However
, we need to keep them
into
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the drying oven for 1-2 days and
then
we move them to the cooling
champer
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(temperature varies from 200- 13000). In the subsequent stage, we do the packaging of the bricks and
this
is consider
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to be the final stage before the delivery of the bricks.
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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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