Many people believe that it is easier to have a healthy lifestyle in the countryside. Other believe that there are health benefits to living in cities. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Most people prefer to move to their hometown after retirement, in the reason of a claim that living in a rural area provides a healthier living condition, while a contrary view is there are the same advantages of
life
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in urban. I strong believe citizens will be
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healthy as rural dwellers if they control their food and do exercise. One of the benefits of living in the countryside is
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the natural
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environment which consists of
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atmosphere. There are
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constructions, factories and vehicles which provide greenhouse gas emissions,
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air pollution is a major concern in the cities.
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may have adverse
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effects especially impacting on
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the lung
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lung
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the reason of
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, everyone usually has a trip with family or friends during
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a holiday
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in
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natural tourist places
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as sea, mountain and
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, that they can refresh and breathe in more oxygen.
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,
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a breath
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of fresh air alone does not improve our
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, individuals should exercise daily. According amenities in cities
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as fitness
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are
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accessible
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, urban dwellers can work out at the gym which has a lot of convenient equipment and
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trainers.
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that, there are many parks in Phnom Penh city, which elders have been jogging, bicycling and dancing as a group in the early morning and evening. In conclusion, even though living in
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the countryside
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provide a clean air environment which may lead to
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a
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good
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, in my opinion, citizens can maintain their
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by regular exercise which is easy to assess in the urban.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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