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Transport delays and long journey times are a widespread phenomenon in many cities today. What are the causes of this problem and how could the situation be improved?

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In today's life pace, every
second
 is especially valuable.
As a result
, the lateness of
transport
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the transport
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 system and a long period
spending
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of spending
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 on
vehicles
 can cause inconvenience and displeasant for everyone.
This
 essay will elaborate on the reasons behind
this
 widespread concern and some feasible measures to deal with it. In my point of view, the foremost cause of either long waiting
time
 or long travelling
time
 stems from a lack of experience of the drivers.
For instance
, a new driver who has no experience on the fastest routes of the city, might not arrive
the
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at the
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 destination on
time
. If drivers estimate an appropriate
time
 to charge the petrol or have the
vehicles
maintainence
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maintenance
, lateness will not be a problem anymore.
Furthermore
,
vehicles
' low quality might be a reason that leads to
this
 phenomenon. If passengers sit on an uncomfortable seat, they will have an unpleasant feeling and think that the travelling
time
 is longer than ever. Degraded equipment will slow down the speed of a vehicle, as the vehicle is unable to move quickly. Turning to possible solutions, probably the most effective measure is to train all the
staffs
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 working
on
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in
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transportation
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the transportation
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 field with adequate knowledge and provide some possible ways to deal with unexpected situations which may occur in
real
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real-time
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time
.
In addition
, the government should invest more funds
on
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in
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 improving
public
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the public
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 transport system to meet the demands of residents, which can be done by upgrading buses and trains with modern equipment and removing run-down ones. To conclude, it is evident that there are a plethora of causes behind the lateness of transport system nowadays, including inexperienced drivers and run-down
vehicles
. It is the
responsible
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 of both the government and the residents to put solutions into place to address the problems they have created.
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