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Improvements in health, education and trade are essential for development of poor nations. However, the governments of richer nations should take more responsibility for helping the poorer nations in such areas. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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Various shifts in welfare, education and economics is an integral aspect to improve the situation around the poor nations. And some people come up with the idea that prosperous ones should support other ones in named spheres. I certainly disagree with
this
 statement as there are additional issues to deal with.
Countries
 that have been developing for hundreds of years should not act on behalf of other regions as there are particular reasons. Even though we can witness the high levels of wages, expectancy, infrastructure in different
countries
, it does not mean they have to share their budget.
For example
, there are some developed
countries
 in Europe that could form decent work and living conditions for their population,
however
, similar circumstances don't extend to the entire country, so the most reasonable option, in
this
 case,is to take care of
this
instead
 of allocating crucial budgets to external problems. Despite
this
, I consider it as a sing disrespect and injustice towards people who fill the very state budget.
In other words
, the majority of the population work and pay taxes assuming it is to be spent on local needs
such
 as recovery centres or maintenance of cultural spots etc.
This
 way, the government can cause protests and riots with the public. Overall, it is not a crime to contribute to poorer
countries
 help in friendly terms,
however
, not every single civilian means it seeing tax bills in their post boxes. Overall, I strongly believe that it is a better choice to cope with local issues
instead
 of coping with
other's
Change the noun form
others
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
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  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
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