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Many people believe that social networking sites ( such as Facebook) have had a huge negative impact on both individuals and society. To what extent do you agree?

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Social media plays a vital role in everyone's life nowadays.
People
 think that it spreads
wrong
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 impression on the residents and the communities. I will discuss not only
positive
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 side but
also
negative
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 side
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this
 thought as per bellow paragraphs. On the initial level, Facebook is very useful for those who are living in a different country. With the help of
this
 networking
site
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people
 started to make new connections and stay in
touch based
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 on their convenient
time
.
For instance
, I joined a Facebook group of a college; located in Canada, to get more information on daily updates and get a
new
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 rented apartment as well. I got all the things perfectly and they added me
in
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 a group when moving to Canada.
This
 is the best source to get help for
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humans to make their life easier without
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 of anyone.
However
, some
people
 might meet
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 party and inviting a problem. Other adults are available all the
time
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social media just to irritate the wise persons and trapped into
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fraud. On the
base
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 of
recent
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 survey, 60% of students created fake accounts or more than one accounts for their fun purpose, so
this
 is the riskiest way to get
into
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 for all the citizens. In conclusion,
time
 and
intension
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is
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 always proved as honest if
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any one
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 does not select
wrong
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 one. I believe, if
people
 spend
right
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time
to do
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 good work,
then
 everything will turn into their best way. Everyone can use chatting networking sites to stay connected and help
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all needy ones.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • erosion
  • face-to-face
  • interactions
  • privacy concerns
  • data breaches
  • misinformation
  • polarize
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • procrastination
  • productivity
  • social isolation
  • dissemination
  • breeding ground
  • vast amounts
  • personal information
  • mental health
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