People living in large cities have to face many problems in everyday life. What are those problems? Should the government encourage people to move to regional towns?

Living in huge
cities
have become increasingly popular. It is believed that
people
who live in large
cities
have to go through a lot of problems in day to day life.
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essay will
further
ellaborate
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elaborate
what are some of the instances of issues that masses face and whether or not
government
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the government
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should encourage
people
to move to
reginal
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regional
towns
instead
. To start with, it happens in crowded
cities
that
people
live in
same
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the same
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area around their offices and
hence
require
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requires
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to commute to
work
via personal vehicles which in turn causes a lot of traffic.
This
causes
people
to wait for a long time in queue during peak hours when
people
either are going home or
comming
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coming
back from
office
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the office
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. Another reason is pollution which is caused by these vehicles that have become a major source of carbon (emits) on a large scale
everyday
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. To my knowledge, industries
also
contribute to the pollution that
cities
face which in turn causes problems to a lot of
people
living around
such
areas.
on the other
hand
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this
becomes a question for
government
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a government
the government
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that should it attract
people
to migrate to towns
instead
.
Well
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this
can be addressed by looking at different situations a person has.
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: An individual who can
work
remotely , without physical presence required at
workplace
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the workplace
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can easily manage to move to town , since it
wont
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won't
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impact his/her
work
. on the flip side if an individual's
work
require
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physical presence for him/her and he starts to live in a town
that is
way
to
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far from the workplace
then
it becomes a problem for him to commute daily. So, in a
nut shell
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. Moving to town can have its own advantages but some
people
can afford it while others do not. One should look at their current situation and
then
decide realistically whether
ot
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or
not it is possible for him to take
this
turn and will it be beneficial rather than a loss.
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  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

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To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • Finally
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