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n some societies, the responsibility of mother differs from the responsibility of father. What is the reason for this? And what do you think of parental issues in the future.

In some nations, there is a significant difference in the roles of
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 and
father
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 . In my opinion,there are some reasons to explain
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 disparity [a]and parental issues would change significantly in the future.
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, I believe that the main reason for the fact that the
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 of
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mother
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 differs from the
responsibility
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 of
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father
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the father
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 is due to the personality traits of
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.On the one hand, mothers tend to be less aggressive, tender which enables them to easily communicate with children.
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, mothers are likely to take the
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 of educating and taking care of a child.
Father
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,
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, may have the nature of superior physical strength .
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, it would be more suitable for them to protect women and children under his care.
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 includes not only physical protection but
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 financial provision and the display of healthy authority in
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. I think that there may be some differences in the
role
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 of
parents
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 in the future. In terms of structure,
mother
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 and
father
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 can both play a
role
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 in tending their child and become the breadwinners of the family.
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 is because if housewives only take care of the family, they would feel bored, whereas husbands can be stressed out because of the extensive workload in order to provide enough money for the family. In conclusion, there is a likelihood that
parents
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 take the same
responsibility
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 in the family . To brief. it may be the disparity of
parents
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’ personal traits that differ the
role
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 of
parents
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. I personally believe that both
mother
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 and
father
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 would share the same
role
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 in the family in the future

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