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. You have been accepted by a university in Canada. Before moving to Canada, you want to gather some information from International Officer. Write to him about your needs. In your letter • introduce yourself • inquire about accommodation options • seek information on Student Discount Card

#university #canada #information #officer #accommodation #options #student #discount #card
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to gather some information about
accomodation
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accommodation
 options. My name is Nikita;
student
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my student
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 ID is YH766554. I have enrolled myself for a full-time Business Studies graduation course in
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University
Univeristy
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the Univeristy
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 of
Toronoto
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Toronto
 for 2021 intake. At the onset, I would like to inquire about
accomodation
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accommodation
accommodations
 facilities for international students in
college
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a college
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hostel
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hostels
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.
In
addition
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,addition
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 the room amenities
either
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are either
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 shared or single, and food services
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are near
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near
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nearby
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by
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apply
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the hostel.
Furthermore
,I need information about student discount
card
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cards
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 and
its
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their
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 advantages and on the services where I can avail discounts being a scholar. I
soilict
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solicit
 your cooperation and waiting for your response. Yours faithfully, Nikita.
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Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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