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Some people believe that it is good for students to have the same teacher for several years. Others think students benefit more from having new teachers each year. Which do you think is better? Give specific reasons to support your opinion.

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Although
 some people argued that it is more beneficial for pupils to have one tutor during their education period while there are some crowd that believes the advantages of having new
instructor
 each period is more,
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 in my ,perspective it is more beneficial to experience new
instructor
 each term,
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undergraduate
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 can gain more knowledge and experience by having a new
instructor
 each year. ,
moreover
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 each high educated torture has a
diffrente
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different
 range of abilities and
technique
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 to their academic background and it results to learn different methods and skills each year from different teachers that
this
 can lead them to be able and prepared to work with
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lecturer
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 for university. The
next
 benefit of having a new teacher is that young students are not still mature enough emotionally and mentally to be independent and
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 the same
instructor
 for years can lead them to be dependent on her/him and
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their mental health if junior can not experience independency in young ages,
then
 they would not be able to work and think independently. to conclude,pupils can benefit from the new teacher for each year in comparison with the same torture for years and
this
 can build independency and skilful students that are handy for society.
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    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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